I'm listening to what you say / Even though I look the other way / But you could never understand / The feeling of what I'm needing

Some days later it happened that young Heriotside was stepping home over the Lang Muir about ten at night, it being his first jaunt from home since his arm had mended.

Do you approve this punctuation? Inspect the punctuation of the whole composition. On the whole, is it good? Does the writer err on the side of underpunctuation or overpunctuation?

They have to pitch to the slugger because there are no empty bases.